CAMP DESCRIPTION

CAMP DESCRIPTION

Achievement Objectives:

Purposes and audiences

• Show a developing understanding of how to shape texts for different purposes and audiences.
• INDICATORS:
• –  constructs texts that show a growing awareness of purpose and audience through careful choice of content, language, and text form;
• –  conveys and sustains personal voice where appropriate.

Ideas

Select, form, and communicate ideas on a range of topics.

INDICATORS:

• –  forms and expresses ideas and information with increased clarity, drawing on a range of sources;
• –  adds or changes details and comments to support ideas, showing some selectivity in the process;
• –  ideas suggest awareness of a range of dimensions or viewpoints.

Language features

Use language features appropriately, showing a developing understanding of their effects.

• INDICATORS:
• –  uses oral, written, and visual language features to create meaning and effect and engage interest;
• –  uses a range of vocabulary to communicate meaning;
• –  demonstrates good understanding of all basic spelling patterns and sounds in written English;
• –  uses an increasing range of strategies to self-monitor and self-correct spelling;
• –  writes legibly, fluently, and with ease when creating texts;
• –  uses a range of text conventions, including most grammatical conventions, appropriately and with increasing accuracy.

Structure

• Show a developing understanding of text structures.
• INDICATORS:
• –  understands that the order and organisation of words, sentences, paragraphs, and images contribute to and affect text meaning;
• –  identifies a range of text forms and recognises some of their characteristics and conventions.
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Motivation:

• Write a description about one event/experience from camp.

Key outcomes:

• To hook the reader in with an interesting beginning
• A variety of sentence starters
• A variety of sentence lengths - simple/compound/complex
• Edit and rework
• Effective peer checking and feedback

My draft and editing:

Published writing:Have you ever felt like your face has turned inside? Well I have, and your about to find out.

I awkwardly walked over to the swing and got tied to a black seat. As I got closer and closer to the top, I could fell my nerves tensing up. Yes I finally made or did I. ''You still have to pull the pin " Yelled Wyatt. My nerves tensed up again. I finally pulled the pin, Aaaaaaaah my jaw opened wide. Yes now I can say I did it .

My reflection and next step: A really good start with lots of langue features but then your story starts to fizzle out. Next step: Keep up the detail through out