Motivation:
Camp Experiences
Learning Objectives:
Level 3
- Show a developing understanding of how to shape texts for different purposes and audiences.
- Select, form, and communicate ideas on a range of topics.
- Use language features appropriately, showing a developing understanding of their effects.
- Organise texts, using a range of appropriate structures.
Level 4
- Show an increasing understanding of how to shape texts for different purposes and audiences.
- Select, develop, and communicate ideas on a range of topics.
- Use a range of language features appropriately, showing an increasing understanding of their effects.
- Organise texts. Using a range of appropriate structures.
Learning goals:
- To hook the reader in with an interesting beginning
- A variety of sentence starters
- A variety of sentence lengths
- Edit and rework
- Effective peer checking and feedback
It was the last night of camp and me and Max knew that this night is our final camp as a Kaiapoi North student so we had to do something
It is roughly 12:45 and the parents were only just getting into bed, so me and Max had to stay quiet. While the rest of our bunk was asleep , Max and I quietly opened our back door. I started to get shivers down my spine as it was getting darker and darker, but luckily we had a torch. ''SHUSH, Be quiet, did you hear that noise?'' I whispered to Max. ''Yeah I think it came from Mikes room''. Mike opened his back door so me and Max quickly darted behind the building. ''Phew, That was close we should go inside.'' I suggested, So we both crept inside hoping that Mike didn't see us.Looking back I'm so glad that we did it
Descriptive Words
My next step is to space my story out with paragraphs
Teacher Comment: Jacksyn, I like the way you have used descriptive words in your writing. It helps to paint a clear picture in the readers mind. I also like the way you have attempted to use speech in your writing.
Your next step is to use paragraphs in your writing.
